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I stand under the blast of the shower
Hoping the pressure will strip the numb away
But the pounding water on my skin only drives it deeper in

The blade makes my skin leak rubies that I don't really need
So I try to force things like 'love' and 'compassion'
Into the space left behind but they only fall out again
And all that's left is more room for 'pain' and 'sorrow'
To grow and leave me feeling bloated with 'agony'

Painkillers call to me, trying to convince me that everything hurts
But I ignore them while I pity them because
They're only trying to fulfil their purpose,
And without their purpose they'd only be empty capsules of sugar
With no other reason than to rot the teeth that you
Smile so prettily through

Contact with others always left me drained and unable to release any more;
They just don't see what they're doing to me.
It's my heart, damn it, give it back so I can
Entrust the needle and thread to someone else
Who's better at putting me back together

You're too willing to open up to me and trust me,
Because I'm so devoid of secrets that you
Fill me up with yours and skip away unburdened while
I struggle with your baggage, but then I always was stronger than you
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Numbby Mrs-Sin

Literature / Poetry / Emotional / Free Verse©2010-2014 Mrs-Sin
I have no idea. This came to me in the shower, because I was just stood there for ages feeling emotionally numb... like I couldn't remember how to feel. Massive backslide.

And the painkillers verse is dedicated to the fact that despite me collapsing and banging my fucked knee on the way down, I refuse to take the ibuprofen that's smugly mocking me on my desk.
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collinsajoshua Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2010
I love your last ten lines
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11x2 Featured By Owner May 21, 2010
D: :hug:
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MaybeMagical Featured By Owner May 21, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm amazed. That just blew me away. Beautiful.
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Mrs-Sin Featured By Owner May 21, 2010
Thanks
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FakeKraid Featured By Owner May 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Some of the imagery of this poem is actually good; do you think you might edit it for form? I think it has potential.
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Mrs-Sin Featured By Owner May 21, 2010
Ok, which bits do you think should go? I'm not sure...
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FakeKraid Featured By Owner May 21, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Well, the first thing to do in poetry is cut everything down to the very quick. Use as few words as you possibly can to convey the image, without sacrificing the clarity.
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Mrs-Sin Featured By Owner May 21, 2010
yes, but I don't know which words aren't necessary... They all feel kinda needed >.<

I don't know if I like this one anyway
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